Train Addendum

Rough reel-
TrainRough.mov

Western Revision

Throughout this story there are “flashes” of jail bars opening in darkness to reveal another closed cell. This is a fantastical symbolic reference. The main character can’t get out of the civilization that holds him captive. There is some sense of confinement that the main character battles mentally.

Jail bars open to light. A man wakes up and goes outside to sees a wagon trail leaving town far off in the distance. The town is empty. There are few traces as to why the town is deserted except for signs of fresh graves in the cemetery, destruction, and neglect- blood splattered on a wall. He enters a church and prays for help and forgiveness. As he exits there is a mirror, which he looks into. The darkness mixed with the flickering candle light shows his true/darker complexion. The past of his wickedness sets in with a brief flashback of murder, corruption, and chaos to the town. When he steps out of the church there is a law-man waiting on him. Of course, there is a standoff between the two men. The showdown ends with the wicked man shot. The next scene opens and the law-man is looking at the other through bars. He is stringing a noose. Through the window, a carriage and some people walk by. The bars close a last time.

Addendum to Train...

Original post.

Notes from 7/10:
Additions-
+Heartbeat as overriding theme.
-Heartbeat transitions to train track thuds/passing shadows to heartbeat again.
-Train continually slows until it squeals to a stop at the point of death.

Possible additions-
+The train as a lifetime allegory. (original- mortality allegory)
-Moving from car to car, with doors locking behind.
-Virgil(AKA Death) showing up in closer and closer seats.
+The characters only communicating on heart/track beats.
+Train whistle as flatline noise?

"'Look! Here is Dis, and this the place where you
will have to arm yourself with fortitude.'
O reader, do not ask of me how I
grew faint and frozen then- I cannot write it:
all words would fall far short of what it was.
I did not die, and I was not alive;
think for yourself, if you have any wit,
what I became, deprived of life and death."
-Dante Alighieri

Pending-
+Style studies (7/12)
+Amended storyreel (7/15)